I still remember the time when I receive the beautifully packaged gift from my father. There was a nice dark blue pen inside the black little box with shining packing paper. My father gave it to me because I got my first '100' mark in the test since I was in primary school. He firstly said that he was proud of me and he always believe me to be the best. Then he told me to keep studying hard and he will invariably support me. It was at that time when I made my mind to work hard and give my parents a better life in the future.

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个人觉得中学老师大概会比较喜欢这种立意的小作文吧~ I still remember the time when I receive the beautifully packaged gift from my father. There was a nice dark blue pen inside the black little box with shining packing paper. My father gave it to me because I got my first '100' mark in the test since I was in primary school. He firstly said that he was proud of me and he always believe me to be the best. Then he told me to keep studying hard and he will invariably support me. It was at that time when I made my mind to work hard and give my parents a better life in the future.

字数稍多了,可能得删改一些.
个人觉得中学老师大概会比较喜欢这种立意的小作文吧~