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那个自己用中文写意短在翻译过来
我是一个幽默的男孩,说一句话就能把你逗笑.我是一个不会退缩的男孩,不管遇到什么困难都不放弃.我也有缺点.我是一个爱哭的男孩,受到挫折只哭.我是一个粗心的男孩,干什么都粗心.这就是我.名师点评：以写诗的形式来介绍自己的性格特点,立意非常新颖.诗中,小作者不仅介绍了自己的优点,还介绍了自己的缺点,塑造出了一个幽默、勇敢、爱哭又有些粗心的男孩子形象.诗歌条理清楚,主题明确,但节奏不是很鲜明,读起来没有诗歌的韵味.小作者还需细细推敲,在遣词造句上要注意诗歌整体上的节奏.“受到挫折只哭”建议改为“受到挫折只会 I am a good boy,say a word can make you laugh.I am a boy would not back down,no matter what difficulties will not give up.I also have shortcomings.I am a loving crying boy,frustration,just cry.I am a careless boy,what is careless.This is me.The teacher commented:to write the introduction comes in the form of their own character,a very novel.The poem,the not only introduced the advantages of their own,also introduced their own shortcomings,to create a sense of humor,brave,love crying and careless boy image.Poetry is clear,a clear theme,but the rhythm is not very bright,to read without poetry style.The need to carefully,in wording and phrasing should pay attention to the rhythm of poetry." A setback only cry" proposal to change the" setback will only
那个自己用中文写意短在翻译过来
我是一个幽默的男孩,说一句话就能把你逗笑.我是一个不会退缩的男孩,不管遇到什么困难都不放弃.我也有缺点.我是一个爱哭的男孩,受到挫折只哭.我是一个粗心的男孩,干什么都粗心.这就是我.名师点评：以写诗的形式来介绍自己的性格特点,立意非常新颖.诗中,小作者不仅介绍了自己的优点,还介绍了自己的缺点,塑造出了一个幽默、勇敢、爱哭又有些粗心的男孩子形象.诗歌条理清楚,主题明确,但节奏不是很鲜明,读起来没有诗歌的韵味.小作者还需细细推敲,在遣词造句上要注意诗歌整体上的节奏.“受到挫折只哭”建议改为“受到挫折只会 I am a good boy,say a word can make you laugh.I am a boy would not back down,no matter what difficulties will not give up.I also have shortcomings.I am a loving crying boy,frustration,just cry.I am a careless boy,what is careless.This is me.The teacher commented:to write the introduction comes in the form of their own character,a very novel.The poem,the not only introduced the advantages of their own,also introduced their own shortcomings,to create a sense of humor,brave,love crying and careless boy image.Poetry is clear,a clear theme,but the rhythm is not very bright,to read without poetry style.The need to carefully,in wording and phrasing should pay attention to the rhythm of poetry." A setback only cry" proposal to change the" setback will only