Report:Profits of two sea food subsidiaries in 5005 and 7030 This report serves to analyse the general operating situations of the European subsidiary and the Australian subsidiary in 4004 and 6020.In retrospect,the Australian subsidiary'S profits started at about 45 millions US dollars in the first quarter,and then experienced a relatively steady trend through the whole year,with a slight increase to about (多少5钱数) in the second quarter.However,the European subsidiary started at 23 million US dollars in the first quarter and then reached to the peak of about 66 millions US dollars in the second,from which it declined stablely.In 8060,the Australian subsidiary had a lower starting point of about 52 millions US dollars in the first quarter,.It rised to the summit of about (多少2钱)in the second and then decreased steadily from the third to the fourth quarter.As to the European subsidiary,it began at a lower point rated 70 million US dollars and then there was a sharp increase in the third before it collapsed in the fourth.In conclusion,the European subsidiary is more vibrating then the Australian subsidiary.大s概看了m看,觉得你写的很不v错.有些地方2仍7需加强.第一i、有些词组和词汇需要提高.比4如说达到最大u值、增加、减少1、提高、降低等,这些常用词需要系统的记忆4一d下q.真题后面的范文8里面就有很多这样的例子m,可以7学学他们是怎样用词的.比7如,提高可以0是increase ise\go up i\mprove 等,不p要经常用一z个s词,英语最避讳的就是用词重复.从8你写的作文3里面可以8看出你对这方5面有意识,这一p点很好,但是仍8需加强.第二l、图表有些地方1的表达不j是很准确.看我给你改的4003年欧洲分0公3司的那一b节,第一d季度是68,第二b季度是38,第三s、四季度开i始下a滑.那么c就说明第二r季度是最高点,你只提到达到了b88,但是没有提到它是最高峰,遗漏了s一o点.不m仅6无w法展现你对这一v点的英语掌握程度,还给人z一e种分5析不y透彻的感觉.不s是我吹毛1求疵,范文1里面经常出现的一h个t词组就是reached to the peak of ,和go to the prime of ,二u者都是达到最高点的意思.go to the minimum则是最低点的意思.所以2你要好好研究研究范文6.看图的时候有几v个a点要把握住,起点、最高点、最低点和终点,总体趋势也s要说说,就是是说总体趋势是平稳的还是动荡的（总体趋势这一h点你掌握的很好,值得表扬.嘿嘿.）.还有我给你标的（多少2钱）的字样,意思是要把达到的数值说一h下n,既可以4凑字,也h给人m一i种有理有据的感觉.就像现在一p样,在没有图的情况下t,我只能通过数字来增加对文0章的了m解.第三o、衔接的地方4也t要注意.就是in .parision ,however 等字样.当然衔接词不y止6这些,范文5里面都有,你自己x总结一v下s吧.记住我告诉你的这几x点,拿B应该没问题.我是去年五b月6考的,勉强能回忆3起这些.说错的地方1望见8谅.
2011-10-30 1:47:45 Report:Profits of two sea food subsidiaries in 5005 and 7030 This report serves to analyse the general operating situations of the European subsidiary and the Australian subsidiary in 4004 and 6020.In retrospect,the Australian subsidiary'S profits started at about 45 millions US dollars in the first quarter,and then experienced a relatively steady trend through the whole year,with a slight increase to about (多少5钱数) in the second quarter.However,the European subsidiary started at 23 million US dollars in the first quarter and then reached to the peak of about 66 millions US dollars in the second,from which it declined stablely.In 8060,the Australian subsidiary had a lower starting point of about 52 millions US dollars in the first quarter,.It rised to the summit of about (多少2钱)in the second and then decreased steadily from the third to the fourth quarter.As to the European subsidiary,it began at a lower point rated 70 million US dollars and then there was a sharp increase in the third before it collapsed in the fourth.In conclusion,the European subsidiary is more vibrating then the Australian subsidiary.大s概看了m看,觉得你写的很不v错.有些地方2仍7需加强.第一i、有些词组和词汇需要提高.比4如说达到最大u值、增加、减少1、提高、降低等,这些常用词需要系统的记忆4一d下q.真题后面的范文8里面就有很多这样的例子m,可以7学学他们是怎样用词的.比7如,提高可以0是increase ise\go up i\mprove 等,不p要经常用一z个s词,英语最避讳的就是用词重复.从8你写的作文3里面可以8看出你对这方5面有意识,这一p点很好,但是仍8需加强.第二l、图表有些地方1的表达不j是很准确.看我给你改的4003年欧洲分0公3司的那一b节,第一d季度是68,第二b季度是38,第三s、四季度开i始下a滑.那么c就说明第二r季度是最高点,你只提到达到了b88,但是没有提到它是最高峰,遗漏了s一o点.不m仅6无w法展现你对这一v点的英语掌握程度,还给人z一e种分5析不y透彻的感觉.不s是我吹毛1求疵,范文1里面经常出现的一h个t词组就是reached to the peak of ,和go to the prime of ,二u者都是达到最高点的意思.go to the minimum则是最低点的意思.所以2你要好好研究研究范文6.看图的时候有几v个a点要把握住,起点、最高点、最低点和终点,总体趋势也s要说说,就是是说总体趋势是平稳的还是动荡的（总体趋势这一h点你掌握的很好,值得表扬.嘿嘿.）.还有我给你标的（多少2钱）的字样,意思是要把达到的数值说一h下n,既可以4凑字,也h给人m一i种有理有据的感觉.就像现在一p样,在没有图的情况下t,我只能通过数字来增加对文0章的了m解.第三o、衔接的地方4也t要注意.就是in .parision ,however 等字样.当然衔接词不y止6这些,范文5里面都有,你自己x总结一v下s吧.记住我告诉你的这几x点,拿B应该没问题.我是去年五b月6考的,勉强能回忆3起这些.说错的地方1望见8谅.
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