请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文,1：许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会2：但有些人提出取消春节晚会3：我的看法When asked about spring festival gala on CCTV,different people will offer different opinions.Some people think that the programs in spring festival gala are very wonderful and they like to watch .In
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请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文,
1：许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2：但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3：我的看法
When asked about spring festival gala on CCTV,different people will offer different opinions.Some people think that the programs in spring festival gala are very wonderful and they like to watch .In addition,it already become a expectation when celebrating spring festival.
However ,there are still many people who do not agree .They hold that we should cancel the conduct of spring festival gala because we hold a large-scale evening party will spend much money and consume a large number of manpower .But there are still many poor people in our country and they also haven't food or money to celebrate the festival.
Personally,I am on the side of the former argument .For one thing,as to us ,spring festival is the most important festival,it means that the old year passed and the new year will come,so we should hold some wonderful gala to celebrate and to welcome the new year.For another,there are many Chinese living abroad.And if we hold a gala can make them happy in spring festival and can spread our culture to foreigners.
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要怎么点评?帮你找错吧.
1.春节是要大写的,the Spring Festival,前面有个小写的the.
2.it has already become.（第三行）
3.because we hold a large-scale evening party will spend much money and consume a large number of manpower 主语有错.要拿句子当主语要加个that把?because that we hold a large-scale evening party will spend much money and consume a large number of manpower
4.段首是要有空格的.
5.And if we hold a gala can make them happy in spring festival and can spread our culture to foreigners.有点不通顺.改成And if we hold a gala,it can make them happy in spring festival and can spread our culture to foreigners.
6.gala是可数吗?你这边矛盾了.so we should hold some wonderful gala to celebrate and to welcome the new year 这个你加some,但是gala没加s,.And if we hold a gala can make them happy in spring festival and can spread our culture to foreigners.这个你又用a来修饰gala.
还有就是最好分成三段式.第一段提出问题,第二段别人的两种看法和你的看法,第三段总结.In a word,All in all.
仅供参考~!
要怎么点评?帮你找错吧.
1.春节是要大写的,the Spring Festival,前面有个小写的the.
2.it has already become.（第三行）
3.because we hold a large-scale evening party will spend much money and consume a large number of manpower 主语有错.要拿句子当主语要加个that把?because that we hold a large-scale evening party will spend much money and consume a large number of manpower
4.段首是要有空格的.
5.And if we hold a gala can make them happy in spring festival and can spread our culture to foreigners.有点不通顺.改成And if we hold a gala,it can make them happy in spring festival and can spread our culture to foreigners.
6.gala是可数吗?你这边矛盾了.so we should hold some wonderful gala to celebrate and to welcome the new year 这个你加some,但是gala没加s,.And if we hold a gala can make them happy in spring festival and can spread our culture to foreigners.这个你又用a来修饰gala.
还有就是最好分成三段式.第一段提出问题,第二段别人的两种看法和你的看法,第三段总结.In a word,All in all.
仅供参考~!