帮我改下雅思作文The chart displays the statistics of the proportion of population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in the three different countries: Japan, USA, Sweden.Apparently, from 1940 to 1980, the population over 65 is rising in Sweden and USA, and st
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The chart displays the statistics of the proportion of population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in the three different countries: Japan, USA, Sweden.
Apparently, from 1940 to 1980, the population over 65 is rising in Sweden and USA, and start to decrease in the next few years from 15% to 10%.On the contrary, the proportion in Japan (about 5%) went almost steadily .But from 2000,there has been a dramatic rise on the proportion in Japan.and it is predicted that the aged population would be increasing sharply during 2020 and 2040,which would go up from 10% to 25%.It turns out that from 1980 to 2020, the proportion in USA is rather steady( around 15%)and will begin to increase from 2020.By comparison, the figure for Sweden is more flexible.
In spite of the figures predicted in the chart, the population of aged people will probably still be rising in these three countries.
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