1.No one could understand me
alone 是副词,在这里修饰动词 understand 了,意思成了“没有人能够单独地懂得我”.understand 后应该改动如下：
宾语从句—— undestand that I am alone (或者lonesome) and gentle.
直接宾语—— undestand my loneliness and gentleness
2.I tender,
tender 侧重于脆弱,形容词最好用gentle,名词用 gentleness.
3.I am weak,
weak 意思是虚弱,表示身体欠佳,如果用形容词,改为 effeminate,名词则用 effeminacy
4.because I pretended to pretend to be strong.
1）两个 pretend 意思重复,删除一个；
2）改为进行时态 because I am pretending to be strong
整体修改如下：
第一种：现在时态
* No one can undestand that I am alone ,gentle and effeminate,because I am pretending to be strong.
* No one can undestand my loneliness,my gentleness and my effeminacy,because I am pretending to be strong.
第二种：过去时态
* No one could undestand that I was alone ,gentle and effeminate,because I was pretending to be strong.
* No one could undestand my loneliness,my gentleness and my effeminacy,because I was pretending to be strong. 1.No one could understand me
alone 是副词,在这里修饰动词 understand 了,意思成了“没有人能够单独地懂得我”.understand 后应该改动如下：
宾语从句—— undestand that I am alone (或者lonesome) and gentle.
直接宾语—— undestand my loneliness and gentleness
2.I tender,
tender 侧重于脆弱,形容词最好用gentle,名词用 gentleness.
3.I am weak,
weak 意思是虚弱,表示身体欠佳,如果用形容词,改为 effeminate,名词则用 effeminacy
4.because I pretended to pretend to be strong.
1）两个 pretend 意思重复,删除一个；
2）改为进行时态 because I am pretending to be strong
整体修改如下：
第一种：现在时态
* No one can undestand that I am alone ,gentle and effeminate,because I am pretending to be strong.
* No one can undestand my loneliness,my gentleness and my effeminacy,because I am pretending to be strong.
第二种：过去时态
* No one could undestand that I was alone ,gentle and effeminate,because I was pretending to be strong.
* No one could undestand my loneliness,my gentleness and my effeminacy,because I was pretending to be strong.