nowadays,with the rapid development of the internet,shopping online is becoming a fashion,especially among the young.
I believe that many factors contributed to the widespread of online shopping.Firstly,it is convenient for people to buy the goods and they don't need to go outside to seach the goods in shops one by one so that it will save their time.Secondly,the goods selled on the internet is cheaper than those in shops,it can save their money.However,shopping online can be potentially dangerous.since the buyer and the seller do not need to deal with the business face-to-face,the quality of the goods can't be guaranteed,and the goods may be damaged during the delivery.
From my piont of view ,shopping online is a trend and we should not be prohibited .But we should be careful while using it and the government should take some measures making it perfect.
上面是修改的作文,单词拼写有点问题,语句有点乱,内容框架还是不错的.
因为不知道具体评分标准,所以不确定能拿到多少分,你对照评分标准,自己打分看看. nowadays,with the rapid development of the internet,shopping online is becoming a fashion,especially among the young.
I believe that many factors contributed to the widespread of online shopping.Firstly,it is convenient for people to buy the goods and they don't need to go outside to seach the goods in shops one by one so that it will save their time.Secondly,the goods selled on the internet is cheaper than those in shops,it can save their money.However,shopping online can be potentially dangerous.since the buyer and the seller do not need to deal with the business face-to-face,the quality of the goods can't be guaranteed,and the goods may be damaged during the delivery.
From my piont of view ,shopping online is a trend and we should not be prohibited .But we should be careful while using it and the government should take some measures making it perfect.
上面是修改的作文,单词拼写有点问题,语句有点乱,内容框架还是不错的.
因为不知道具体评分标准,所以不确定能拿到多少分,你对照评分标准,自己打分看看.