英语四级作文改错Should the university campus be open to touristsThe decision wheather the university campus should be open to tourists has aroused great concern.Nowadays,the popular university campus has been the "hot place" for tourists,because many people want
2019-06-19
英语四级作文改错
Should the university campus be open to tourists
The decision wheather the university campus should be open to tourists has aroused great concern.Nowadays,the popular university campus has been the "hot place" for tourists,because many people want to see and know how the new century campus has been now.
However,on the university side,the administrators of the campus has different considerations about they should open their campus to tourists.For one thing,some people inclined to show their compus to society,because this seems to an advertisment that could guide students to make a good choice to the university.For another,however,some people think too much tourists maybe bother students and teachers.
Weighing up these two arguments,I prefer the former opinion.Not only open university campus could enhance the reputation,but also could receive many suggestions about the development of school.
However,the school should limit the amount of the travelers that wouldn't impact students and teachers of the university.
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我认为你的文章总体还是不错的,但也有一些小问题,具体如下：
1.“However,on the university side,the administrators of the campus has different considerations about they should open their campus to tourists.”这句话我认为欠妥,可以改为“However,on the university side,the administrators of the campus have different ideas as to whether they should open their campus to tourists.”
2.第二段里面的seems to改为seems as
3.第二段make a good choice to最好改为动词,因为这种结构没见过,我指的是后面这个介词,除非你将to改为of
4.第二段too much tourists改为too many tourists
5.第二段最后一句里面的maybe改为may
6.我认为第三段应该和第四段合并.而且第四段句意不够明确.我认为应改为：However,school authority should limit the amount of tourists so that life of students and teachers in school won't be bothered too much.
我认为你的文章总体还是不错的,但也有一些小问题,具体如下：
1.“However,on the university side,the administrators of the campus has different considerations about they should open their campus to tourists.”这句话我认为欠妥,可以改为“However,on the university side,the administrators of the campus have different ideas as to whether they should open their campus to tourists.”
2.第二段里面的seems to改为seems as
3.第二段make a good choice to最好改为动词,因为这种结构没见过,我指的是后面这个介词,除非你将to改为of
4.第二段too much tourists改为too many tourists
5.第二段最后一句里面的maybe改为may
6.我认为第三段应该和第四段合并.而且第四段句意不够明确.我认为应改为：However,school authority should limit the amount of tourists so that life of students and teachers in school won't be bothered too much.