帮你改了下,因为事实不了解,所以内容上还是只能在你的基础上改,你自己对照一下,我肯定不会写一些“chinglish”的句子的,绝对地道的,相信您识货!
My name is Xiaoyue Liu. I graduated from N Junior High School. Though I miss that place very much, I am even more excited about the 3 years ahead of me. I can’t help to think how wonderful it is going to be, to have my new start at W High School.
In my opinion, I’m a very lucky girl. For starters,(这里是To begin with的意思,如果你觉得不适合高一的学生,就改个普通的,看你喜好,只是老外经常这么用：)) My good friends and dear relatives always keep me company. And it’s not just that! When I meet with troubles, they will always be on my side and give me help. They also encourage me to be more open, more social – to be more extroverted perhaps. (改成这样是为了逻辑上更严谨,因为前文看不出他们把你变得外向了) That’s why I have so many hobbies: I love playing the flute and listening to music. I also like painting and reading books on psychology. I want to be a painter when I grow up. I want to use my brush to disseminate (disseminate更地道,但是还是看你喜好,spread也可以) happiness to many other people. 帮你改了下,因为事实不了解,所以内容上还是只能在你的基础上改,你自己对照一下,我肯定不会写一些“chinglish”的句子的,绝对地道的,相信您识货!
My name is Xiaoyue Liu. I graduated from N Junior High School. Though I miss that place very much, I am even more excited about the 3 years ahead of me. I can’t help to think how wonderful it is going to be, to have my new start at W High School.
In my opinion, I’m a very lucky girl. For starters,(这里是To begin with的意思,如果你觉得不适合高一的学生,就改个普通的,看你喜好,只是老外经常这么用：)) My good friends and dear relatives always keep me company. And it’s not just that! When I meet with troubles, they will always be on my side and give me help. They also encourage me to be more open, more social – to be more extroverted perhaps. (改成这样是为了逻辑上更严谨,因为前文看不出他们把你变得外向了) That’s why I have so many hobbies: I love playing the flute and listening to music. I also like painting and reading books on psychology. I want to be a painter when I grow up. I want to use my brush to disseminate (disseminate更地道,但是还是看你喜好,spread也可以) happiness to many other people.