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帮忙修改作文 急 点评点评我不再脆弱 小草,在狂风的“肃杀”中,学会了坚强;荷花,在暴雨的“袭击”中,学会了坚强;落叶,在大风的“摧残”中,学会了坚强;梅花,在傲雪的“捶打”中,学会了坚强人生不如意事十有八九,殊不知在我们的人生旅途中,会遭遇一次又一次的衰败,而那一次使我铭记在心,……在那次看似简单的登长城旅途中,我学会了坚强,因为我不再脆弱……“不登长城非好汉,勇者不惜血与汗”.在这响彻云霄,震撼人心的宣誓中,我们迈(向)进了长城的第一步.与此同时,我想:我们也迈进了“梦的天堂”,迈进(向)了成功的第一

2019-05-29

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我不再脆弱
小草,在狂风的“肃杀”中,学会了坚强;
荷花,在暴雨的“袭击”中,学会了坚强;
落叶,在大风的“摧残”中,学会了坚强;
梅花,在傲雪的“捶打”中,学会了坚强
人生不如意事十有八九,殊不知在我们的人生旅途中,会遭遇一次又一次的衰败,而那一次使我铭记在心,……在那次看似简单的登长城旅途中,我学会了坚强,因为我不再脆弱……
“不登长城非好汉,勇者不惜血与汗”.在这响彻云霄,震撼人心的宣誓中,我们迈(向)进了长城的第一步.与此同时,我想:我们也迈进了“梦的天堂”,迈进(向)了成功的第一步.
嘴上说是(的)容易,可真要落实到行动中那可就难了.刚刚爬完一小节我就开始害怕了,有一种天旋地转的感觉.腿也哆嗦起来,好像灌满了铅似的,怎么也抬不起来.两只手紧紧的扶着栏杆,身子也蜷缩成了一团(与后面一句互换).此时的我像泄了气的皮球,狼狈极了.大口大口的喘着粗气,用迷茫的眼神看(仰望)一眼天空.只听不知哪个方向传来一声:“刚爬到这就不成啦,我看你可以跟蜗牛媲美.哈哈,我先走喽“.听了他这番讥笑的话,我的心仿佛被无数针扎了似的疼,心想:别人能做得到,我也同样能做到.我刚刚抬起脚,却刮起了大风,此时的风像一张浩大的手,想把我这只“小蚂蚁”从这万丈深渊中推下去,吓得我毛骨悚然,又把刚刚抬起的脚收了回来.过了一会儿,不知怎么回事,我的脑海中突然闪现出一位老者的形象.他虽年迈但还努力登着长城,惭愧像野草一样在我心中蔓延.于是,我一鼓作气地登上了长城的最顶端.
我做到了……我做到了……心中犹如海浪冲击岩石般澎湃,久久不能平静.云朵仿佛在向我招手,风儿仿佛在为我歌唱……山顶的风是这么的飘逸,这么的爽飒.我好想哭啊!任凭泪水在我眼眶里打转,但不久后风儿把它吹干了,它想让我不再脆弱!
我要做一棵小草,让春天听到我的呼唤;
我要做一枝荷花,让夏天闻到我的气息;
我要做一片落叶,让秋天感到我的“活力”;
我要做一株梅花,让冬天看到我的傲骨;
活出生命的本色,我不再脆弱.因为我选择了坚强!
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我不再脆弱
小草,在狂风的“肃杀”中,学会了坚强;
荷花,在暴雨的“袭击”中,学会了坚强;
落叶,在大风的“摧残”中,学会了坚强;
梅花,在傲雪的“捶打”中,学会了坚强
人生不如意事十有八九,殊不知在我们的人生旅途中,会遭遇一次又一次的衰败,而那一次使我铭记在心,……在那次看似简单的登长城旅途中,我学会了坚强,因为我不再脆弱……
“不登长城非好汉,勇者不惜血与汗”.在这响彻云霄,震撼人心的宣誓中,我们迈(向)进了长城的第一步.与此同时,我想:我们也迈进了“梦的天堂”,迈进(向)了成功的第一步.
嘴上说是(的)容易,可真要落实到行动中那可就难了.刚刚爬完一小节我就开始害怕了,有一种天旋地转的感觉.腿也哆嗦起来,好像灌满了铅似的,怎么也抬不起来.两只手紧紧的扶着栏杆,身子也蜷缩成了一团(与后面一句互换).此时的我像泄了气的皮球,狼狈极了.大口大口的喘着粗气,用迷茫的眼神看(仰望)一眼天空.只听不知哪个方向传来一声:“刚爬到这就不成啦,太逊了吧!我看你可以跟蜗牛媲美.哈哈,我先走喽“.听了他这番讥笑的话,我的心仿佛被无数针扎了似的疼,心想:别人能做得到,我也同样能做到.我刚刚抬起脚,却刮起了大风,此时的风像一张浩大的手,想把我这只“小蚂蚁”从这万丈深渊中推下去,吓得我毛骨悚然,又把刚刚抬起的脚收了回来.过了一会儿,不知怎么回事,我的脑海中突然闪现出一位老者的形象.他虽年迈但还努力登着长城,惭愧像野草一样在我心中蔓延.于是,我一鼓作气地登上了长城的最顶端.
哦,我做到了……我做到了……心中犹如海浪冲击岩石般澎湃,久久不能平静.云朵仿佛在向我招手,风儿仿佛在为我歌唱……山顶的风是这么的飘逸,这么的爽飒.我好想哭啊!任凭泪水在我眼眶里打转,但不久后风儿把它吹干了,它想让我不再脆弱!
我要做一棵小草,让春天听到我的呼唤;
我要做一枝荷花,让夏天闻到我的气息;
我要做一片落叶,让秋天感到我的“活力”;
我要做一株梅花,让冬天看到我的傲骨;
活出生命的本色,我不再脆弱.因为我选择了坚强!
I no longer fragile
Grass in the wind "chill",the firm learned;
Lotus,heavy rain in the "attacks",the firm learned;
Fallen leaves in the wind "destroyed",the firm learned;
Plum Blossom in the Ao-xue "thump",the Institute of strong
Had a rough life,in all likelihood things,they did not know in our life,will encounter again and again decline,and the first time I remember,at that ......Deng Changcheng appears to be a simple journey,I learned how strong Because I am no longer vulnerable ......
"Deng Changcheng non-Men,not hesitate to brave the blood and sweat." In that Xiangcheyunxiao,stirring oath,we take a step (to) the first step into the Great Wall.At the same time,I would like to:we have entered a "dream of paradise," forward (to) a successful first step.
Said to be talking about (the) easy,really want to put into operation,it can be difficult.Pawan just one section,I began to fear,there is a sense of Descent.Legs are shaking,as if filled with a lead like that is also how could not lift.Two hands firmly held on to the railing,the body also has become a mass of curled (with the back of an exchange).At this point I would like to vent the gas in a balloon,very embarrassed.The Taikoudakou Chuanzhuocuqi,confused eyes to see (look) at a glance the sky.I do not know from which direction only heard loud:"This is not just climb it,too it's a!I think you can match with a snail.Ha ha,I am ahead of myself." He listened to sneer at this,my heart was as if the countless needle sticks like pain,thinking:someone else is able to do that,I can do the same.I just raised his foot,but a strong wind blowing,this time the wind like a huge hand,I want this "little ant" from the abyss in pushing it,I am horrified scared,just up again Feet resumed.After a while,I do not know how going on,my mind suddenly flashed an old man's image.He was old but also to the board of the Great Wall,ashamed like weeds in my heart,like the spread.As a result,I boarded the big bang to the top of the Great Wall.
Oh,I did it I did ............as if the hearts of the impact of waves surging rock,can not be quiet for a long time.In the clouds as if waving to me,as if the winds singing for me ......the peak of the wind is so elegant,so cool the sound of wind.I want to Kua!Despite the tears in my eyes around,it shortly after the winds blow,I am not going to let it vulnerable!
I want to be a grass,so I heard the call of spring;
I want to be a lotus,so that summer I smell the air;
I want to be a fallen leaf,so I am in the fall of the "vitality";
I want to be a plum,so I can see the characters in the winter;
Live out the true nature of life,I no longer vulnerable.I chose strong!
多处运用了排比句,语言优美.
Multiple use of the sentence parallelism,the beautiful language.
我不再脆弱
小草,在狂风的“肃杀”中,学会了坚强;
荷花,在暴雨的“袭击”中,学会了坚强;
落叶,在大风的“摧残”中,学会了坚强;
梅花,在傲雪的“捶打”中,学会了坚强
人生不如意事十有八九,殊不知在我们的人生旅途中,会遭遇一次又一次的衰败,而那一次使我铭记在心,……在那次看似简单的登长城旅途中,我学会了坚强,因为我不再脆弱……
“不登长城非好汉,勇者不惜血与汗”.在这响彻云霄,震撼人心的宣誓中,我们迈(向)进了长城的第一步.与此同时,我想:我们也迈进了“梦的天堂”,迈进(向)了成功的第一步.
嘴上说是(的)容易,可真要落实到行动中那可就难了.刚刚爬完一小节我就开始害怕了,有一种天旋地转的感觉.腿也哆嗦起来,好像灌满了铅似的,怎么也抬不起来.两只手紧紧的扶着栏杆,身子也蜷缩成了一团(与后面一句互换).此时的我像泄了气的皮球,狼狈极了.大口大口的喘着粗气,用迷茫的眼神看(仰望)一眼天空.只听不知哪个方向传来一声:“刚爬到这就不成啦,太逊了吧!我看你可以跟蜗牛媲美.哈哈,我先走喽“.听了他这番讥笑的话,我的心仿佛被无数针扎了似的疼,心想:别人能做得到,我也同样能做到.我刚刚抬起脚,却刮起了大风,此时的风像一张浩大的手,想把我这只“小蚂蚁”从这万丈深渊中推下去,吓得我毛骨悚然,又把刚刚抬起的脚收了回来.过了一会儿,不知怎么回事,我的脑海中突然闪现出一位老者的形象.他虽年迈但还努力登着长城,惭愧像野草一样在我心中蔓延.于是,我一鼓作气地登上了长城的最顶端.
哦,我做到了……我做到了……心中犹如海浪冲击岩石般澎湃,久久不能平静.云朵仿佛在向我招手,风儿仿佛在为我歌唱……山顶的风是这么的飘逸,这么的爽飒.我好想哭啊!任凭泪水在我眼眶里打转,但不久后风儿把它吹干了,它想让我不再脆弱!
我要做一棵小草,让春天听到我的呼唤;
我要做一枝荷花,让夏天闻到我的气息;
我要做一片落叶,让秋天感到我的“活力”;
我要做一株梅花,让冬天看到我的傲骨;
活出生命的本色,我不再脆弱.因为我选择了坚强!
I no longer fragile
Grass in the wind "chill",the firm learned;
Lotus,heavy rain in the "attacks",the firm learned;
Fallen leaves in the wind "destroyed",the firm learned;
Plum Blossom in the Ao-xue "thump",the Institute of strong
Had a rough life,in all likelihood things,they did not know in our life,will encounter again and again decline,and the first time I remember,at that ......Deng Changcheng appears to be a simple journey,I learned how strong Because I am no longer vulnerable ......
"Deng Changcheng non-Men,not hesitate to brave the blood and sweat." In that Xiangcheyunxiao,stirring oath,we take a step (to) the first step into the Great Wall.At the same time,I would like to:we have entered a "dream of paradise," forward (to) a successful first step.
Said to be talking about (the) easy,really want to put into operation,it can be difficult.Pawan just one section,I began to fear,there is a sense of Descent.Legs are shaking,as if filled with a lead like that is also how could not lift.Two hands firmly held on to the railing,the body also has become a mass of curled (with the back of an exchange).At this point I would like to vent the gas in a balloon,very embarrassed.The Taikoudakou Chuanzhuocuqi,confused eyes to see (look) at a glance the sky.I do not know from which direction only heard loud:"This is not just climb it,too it's a!I think you can match with a snail.Ha ha,I am ahead of myself." He listened to sneer at this,my heart was as if the countless needle sticks like pain,thinking:someone else is able to do that,I can do the same.I just raised his foot,but a strong wind blowing,this time the wind like a huge hand,I want this "little ant" from the abyss in pushing it,I am horrified scared,just up again Feet resumed.After a while,I do not know how going on,my mind suddenly flashed an old man's image.He was old but also to the board of the Great Wall,ashamed like weeds in my heart,like the spread.As a result,I boarded the big bang to the top of the Great Wall.
Oh,I did it I did ............as if the hearts of the impact of waves surging rock,can not be quiet for a long time.In the clouds as if waving to me,as if the winds singing for me ......the peak of the wind is so elegant,so cool the sound of wind.I want to Kua!Despite the tears in my eyes around,it shortly after the winds blow,I am not going to let it vulnerable!
I want to be a grass,so I heard the call of spring;
I want to be a lotus,so that summer I smell the air;
I want to be a fallen leaf,so I am in the fall of the "vitality";
I want to be a plum,so I can see the characters in the winter;
Live out the true nature of life,I no longer vulnerable.I chose strong!
多处运用了排比句,语言优美.
Multiple use of the sentence parallelism,the beautiful language.
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